Twilight Guardians

Character Format:
Name:Atlas Bladeguard
Age:16
Race:Fiend
Appearance: I'll look
History: Atlas is the bastard child of a strong female knight human and a lowly murderous demon, Atlas grew up fighting the opression that his people face, partcularly a gang of voilent angels who tore the bones out of Atlas's wings at every meeting, the wings were once pround a scale covered but have been reduced to disfigured pieces of flesh with crooked bones, this causes him much pain. Atlas has recently began wandering after being trained in the arts of combat by a fallen angle, who taunt him to make use of his limityed fighting capabilities.
Powers: None(yet)
Weapons/Amour: Two long swords and a huge broadsword
Other Info:

Hows that?

Ryu wrote:

Character Format:
Name:Atlas Bladeguard
Age:16
Race:Fiend
Appearance: I'll look
History: Atlas is the bastard child of a strong female knight human and a lowly murderous demon, Atlas grew up fighting the opression that his people face, partcularly a gang of voilent angels who tore the bones out of Atlas's wings at every meeting, the wings were once pround a scale covered but have been reduced to disfigured pieces of flesh with crooked bones, this causes him much pain. Atlas has recently began wandering after being trained in the arts of combat by a fallen angle, who taunt him to make use of his limityed fighting capabilities.
Powers: None(yet)
Weapons/Amour: Two long swords and a huge broadsword
Other Info:

Hows that?

I doubt there are gang of angels since each one of them is the son/daughter of the God King meaning there all royal. There is also no such thing as fallen angels. And it's spelled Angels. Everything else looks fine.

Meh, was a rush job, I'll iron out the kinks.

Tell me when your done.

That's better. Just get a picture or a description and your accepted!

I'll do that when I get back home, I have one in mind.

Also I'll touch upo the profile when I add the pocture, I've just gotten an interesting idea.

I look forward to it.

Yes Ryu.. it definitly needs a picture.

After I eat dinner I'm going to start this rp!

Well I thought my post was pretty good.

It was fine.